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It is inevitable that traditional cultures will be lost as technology develops. Technology and traditional cultures are incompatible. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

#cultures #technology
Some people agree that traditional cultures are going to be out-of-date due to the development of technology. I completely disagree with
this
 viewpoint and I believe that all of us could find a better way to live with them.
First
 of all, traditional cultures
have
Suggestion
has
 a connection with a country's history and national identity of people who treasure them, which means both countries and people are unconsciously influenced by traditional cultures and custom in all ages.
For example
, calligraphy could be a typical representative of old cultures whose importance has been challenged by typing. Despite that handwriting seems to be less efficient in terms of conveying instant messages, it serves as a key means to record history and it passes the civilization in its characterized way. As technology progresses, calligraphy
also
develops
Suggestion
developed
itself
the thing named or in question
it
 into an art, driving the styles of clothes and furniture in the new era.
On the other hand
, I do understand that fully obeying the traditional activities in detail could lead to some bad habits,
such
 as burning paper in the Qingming Festival.
However
, what we put emphasis on is the meaning behind the behaviour rather than the activity itself. We can choose alternative ways like lighting a candle and "burning" paper on an electronic screen in order to show our respect to ancestors and revolutionary martyrs. Apart from the differences in form, our mind for sacrificial culture and treasure for traditional values are essentially the same with the help of technology. In conclusion, it is clear to me that we have to be in favour of traditional cultures all the time for the full appreciation of the identification with our own race and value.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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