In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which of these two systems is more appropriate in today’s world?

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Currently, people have different views on whether secondary schools should introduce a wide range of subjects to their students or they should only select some specific subjects related to particular jobs. While studying a variety of subjects brings some advantages to some extent, I believe that it is more essential for students to focus on specific topics. On the one hand, there are some benefits of learning a wide range of subjects at school.

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, children have more opportunities to gain an overview of a wide range of subjects and understand different aspects of life.

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helps them to develop comprehensive thinking and become an all-sided person.

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, many teenagers do not have enough experience to decide which subjects they are really passionate about.

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, they should be given the chance to get exposed to as many subjects as possible so that they can identify their strengths and weaknesses, allowing them to learn deeper in the future.

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, learning subjects related to a particular job brings more advantages for students.

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equips fundamental knowledge for students’ future career. Only studying several subjects that will be useful in the future allows students to deepen their knowledge and skills in the career that they hope to pursue after graduation.

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, these days, many recruiters in modern economy tend to seek candidates with a good grounding in a single field over those who have general knowledge, but have little or no expertise in a particular area. In conclusion, Whereas there are some

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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In some countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which of these two systems is more appropriate in today’s world?

Fully explain your ideas

interest in homeschooling is becoming more widespread around the world. in your opinion, should school be compulsory for all children, or should families be allowed the right to choose to educate their children at home?

The widespread of the Internet gives people more freedom to work and study at home instead of traveling to office and school. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

Some people think that older employees contribute most to the success of a company. Others think that younger people play a more vital role. Discuss both views and disccuss your opinion.

With the increased global demand in oil and gas, undiscovered areas of the world should be opened up to access more resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?