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More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. What are the benefits and drawbacks?

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Nowadays, there is an upward trend in the number of students who opt to
pursuit
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pursue
 their
studies
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study
oversea
beyond or across the sea
overseas
. While there are several advantages for those who do
this
, there are
also
 some possible disadvantages. On the one hand, studying abroad brings benefits in some certain aspects.
Firstly
, it is
the good
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the best
 way for them to meet
develop
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developmental
 education. Not only are teachers and
tutors good
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tutors, good
/ highly
qualified but
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qualified, but
 study environment and modern equipment are
also
 excellent, so students can do their best to achieve
more successful
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more success
 in their studies.
Secondly
, they have many opportunities to discover and learn something new. They have chances to meet people from different countries and can widen their social networks. These may broaden their knowledge of people and cultures which they have never known before if they have just stayed in their local regions.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of studying at colleges and universities abroad cannot be overlooked. A negative aspect of
this
 option is that students have to face culture shock – an issue that those who study abroad must overcome if they want to develop their career here. Overseas students often find not only different customs and
values but
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values, but
alsothe
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also the
 language barrier challenging, and it takes a long period of time to adapt to life around them. Another problem faced by students who decide to study in a foreign country is homesickness. Living alone in an unfamiliar country without their family members and relatives by their side, these students often feel insecure and helpless
.
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.
This
 mood is likely to affect their attitudes and working methods, and their productivities will be decreased. In conclusion, it seems to me that there are both benefits and drawbacks for students who choose to
further
 their studies in a foreign country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • opportunities
  • personal growth
  • development
  • exposure
  • diverse
  • perspectives
  • language skills
  • job prospects
  • adapting
  • environment
  • financial considerations
  • costs
  • homesickness
  • social isolation
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