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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society.

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Social media are thought by many people to have had a lot of harmful
impacts
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impact
 on each of us as well as society.
Nevertheless
, I believe that
besides
 detrimental aspects, social networking sites offer numerous benefits to individual people. It is
undebatable
not open to question; obviously true
indisputable
indubitable
 that social networking brings us obvious advantages.
First
 and foremost, with social
media we
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media, we
 can stay connected to family and friends.
For example
, you and your childhood friends no longer talked to each other since you moved to another place;
however
, through
facebook
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Facebook
, you are able to rekindle
old friendship
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old friendships
an old friendship
.
Besides
, social networking helps bring everybody together to exchange knowledge or simply meet people having common interests.
On the other hand
, it is clear that there are quite a few
problem
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problems
 associated with the increase of social network users. The main issue is that social network remains a big hole of security which is related to our privacy. We are sharing too much about us on social media which means personal data can easily be hacked and shared publicly.
This
 risk of identity theft may cause financial losses and legal problems for the victims..
Moreover
,
instead
 of rolling in outdoor activities people, especially teenagers prefer to make themselves comfortable on chairs interacting with virtual friends.
Consequently
, their communication skills are gradually lost
,
Accept space
,
 which may lead to autism. In conclusion, I am convinced that social networking has both positive and negative effects, but we still have to develop it while trying to limit possible drawbacks that harm individual people and society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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