these days lots of people have their own computer and mobile its has become quite easy do job from home do you think it has more advantage and disadvantage to do work from home?

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is true that
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now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
people use their computer and
technology
for
work
or job at
home
because it is guide easy.
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technologies
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technology
has many advantages and disadvantage. These both consequences
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are discussed
in the following paragraphs
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The first
and the foremost reason is obesity
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If
nation will do comfort
work
through new
technology
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technology, then
then
they have
less hard workout
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a less hard workout
in their daily life and it is the cause of many problems or
desease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
diseases
like
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respiratory disorder characterized by wheezing; usually of allergic origin
asthma
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least problem, blood pressure, tiredness
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In
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a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
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its
it's
effects on our body and beauty.
Physical
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Physically
fit
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fitness
and good looking person do their job in an organization
then
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than
they are doing
hard
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the hard work
work
and them body is in motion
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It
reduces the laziness and show
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action
activities
.
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effects on the relationship because mostly people busy
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on
the telephone and they have ten
time
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times
for conversation with their family member
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if
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If
they
work
in any
organization
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organization, then
then
they discuss their day with their family member and they have
time
for the other
hand job
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hand, job
at
home
with the help of computer and telephone have good impact of persons because it is
time
saving person and stress free. They give their
work
easily
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at
national and international level.
More over
in addition
Moreover
the business at
home
through person’s own
technology
equipment helps in earning for students. Students start their
on line
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
work
with their study so that they do not waste their
time
and are
finacialy
from a financial point of view
financially
strong. In the conclusion
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recapulate
regain or make up for
recuperate
that online business at
home
have both advantage and disadvantage
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I would argue that it has more disadvantage
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doubt
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smoothes
our
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life, but
health is wealth
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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