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Stores should sell local food products and not the imported food products. Do you agree or disagree?

#stores #food #products
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Big stores have always been a hub for people because of availability of
wide variety
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a wide variety
 of assorted
food
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 products. Recently, there has been
a
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an
 untoward concern whether stores should focus more on selling local
food
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 products over imported
food
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 products. I too believe, that local
food
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 products
has
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have
 more benefits over imported
food
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 products as they are fresh and can support local traders, farmers, businessmen and
overall
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over all
 nations growth. To commence with, undoubtedly, imported
food
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 products will enhance the variety in their own category, yet, they cannot be treated as a substitute for local
food
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 products. Local
food
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 products
ensures
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ensure
 fresh
food
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 with no or less
preservatives
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 as they are grown in home country and does not necessitate the
usage
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use
 of
preservatives
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, exception to
this
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 can be perishable products.
Furthermore
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, Local
food
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 products supports small farmers, traders and businessman
to enhance
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enhance
 businesses and
production which
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production, which
 in-turn leads to the overall growth of the nation as
money
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the money
 stays within the country, and can be used for development of public facilities. Nations supporting local
food
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 products tend to prosper more because of more focus on the growth of its people and businesses resulting in increased contribution to the country and its development.
On the contrary
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, imported
food
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 products
ensures
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ensure
 the reach of the people to different variety of
food
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 products,
however
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, these products require higher usage of
preservatives
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 as they travel across the
nations
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nation's
 border spending more time in transit. Enclosing freshness at the cost of
preservatives
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 have
an
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a
 negative impact on people’s health. As per a survey, more than 60% of imported
food
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 product have higher preservative contents than local
food
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 products which is resulting in a steep decline in their consumption. In summary, undoubtedly, imported
food
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 products add more
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
 to the table, yet, local
food
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 products outweigh them in freshness, preservative content and nutritional value and stores should
emphasis
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emphasize
 more on selling local
food
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 products than imported
food
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 products.
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