In recent years, people in many countries have been able to afford more material possessions such as electronic kitchen appliances, computers and vehicles. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this increased level of affluence, and give your opinion about whether this is a positive or negative development.
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Today’s
people
in the world buy a lot of things such
as kitchen equipment, cars or computers to serve for their life. This
has resulted in rose perfectly
consumption. Change the word
perfect
This
essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks impact on changing to spend
. There are so great many Wrong verb form
spending
reason
for individual domestics to buy a car or computer. Change to a plural noun
reasons
Firstly
, people
have
a car can drive to many places they wantCorrect pronoun usage
who have
that
Correct pronoun usage
which
makes
them Verb problem
gives
get
freedom. Verb problem
apply
Also
they can drive to Add a comma
Also,
Correct pronoun usage
their job
job
, Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
this
means they can obtain many different Correct pronoun usage
which
job
which not depend on anything. Change to a plural noun
jobs
Secondly
, computer
Fix the agreement mistake
computers
also
more important chances to study or find out something we do not know or watch news or films that TV does not have. Especially, we can connected
communication with other Change the verb form
connect
people
in the world. Lastly
, women always
busy Add a missing verb
are always
at
work or chores Change preposition
with
therefore
they need kitchen devices so that it
can help them Correct pronoun usage
they
cleaning
Wrong verb form
clean
house
orCorrect article usage
the house
cooking
. Replace the word
cook
However
, synonymous consumption bring
on more disadvantage. One of the main Change the verb form
brings
problem
is pollution, which Change to a plural noun
problems
come
from the manufactory. Mode of production cars, computers or other appliances probably leads to use the amount of resource that increasing pollution levels. AfterChange the verb form
comes
producing
, the proportion of cars supply Replace the word
production
to
greenhouse gas Change preposition
apply
release
Change the verb form
releases
the
Change preposition
to the
environment
which makes people
ill. In addition
, technology devices or kitchen equipment although
they do not affect the environment
but
Correct word choice
apply
they
Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
risky
explosiveness and take up space in Replace the word
risk
house
. Add an article
the house
To sum up
, the
material possessions are necessary for real life but first of Correct article usage
apply
all
we should Add a comma
all,
aware
of concern and protect the Add a missing verb
be aware
environment
. Also
need to balance these advantages between spending and detrimental environment
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