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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think ,might be effective

#price #petrol #traffic #pollution #measures
Some individuals argue that the heightened
price
 of
petrol
 is the most effective method of tackling to
growing
Suggestion
grow
 traffic and environmental pollution. While I accept that
this
 method is good in some ways, I believe that there are better measures for
this
 problem.
To begin
 with, I believe it is a good idea
to
Suggestion
for
of
 raising the
price
 of
petrol
.
Firstly
,
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
 introduce the heightened
price
 of
petrol
, which may restrict people to using the private cars.
As a result
, citizens have the tendency to use bicycles or public transport rather than using private cars.
Besides
, increasing the
price
 of
petrol
 has
also
 detrimental effects on the life of people. Due to the heightened
price
pf
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
petrol
, ticket
price
also
 increases.
Therefore
,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 low-income people may face financial problem.
However
, I would argue that there are better methods of decreasing congestion and protecting environment. The
first
 one is to raise people’s awareness about consequences which may occur
.
Accept space
.
For example
, Vietnam government held the meeting to promote the movement called Green Summer. Many teenagers supported
this
 movement and did instructions of the organiser. Another measure is that governments should invest a huge amount of money on improving public transport and constructing
new rail way
Suggestion
a new railway
new railway
 for bikers. In conclusion, I believe apart
form
a giver or sender
from
 increasing the
price
 of
petrol
 there are more effective ways to solve growing traffic and environmental pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Discourage
  • Incentivize
  • Alternative energy
  • Public transportation
  • Lower-income
  • Carpool
  • Ride-sharing
  • Congestion
  • Urban planning
  • Pedestrian-friendly
  • Tax incentives
  • Electric and hybrid vehicles
  • Emissions standards
  • Cleaner vehicles
  • Congestion charges
  • Bicycle lanes
  • Sustainable
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