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Scientists say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think this is a positive or negative social development?

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Scientists expect that human beings will have no
language
 barrier in the future by using a mutual
language
. In my view,
such
 a
development
,
although
 essential at some point, could be seen as
detrimental step
Suggestion
a detrimental step
 forward. On the one hand, the elimination of
language
 barrier renders people some advantages, especially in education and
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
.
Firstly
, speaking the same
language
 in education brings a myriad of opportunities to approach various sources of knowledge. Take
History
Suggestion
a history
a History
 as an example, students from every corner of the world will be able to research
other countries' history
Suggestion
the other countries' history
 via English materials published on
Internet
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the Internet
-based libraries in case English, which all students master worldwide, becomes the mutual
language
 of studying.
Secondly
, no
language
 conflict in healthcare service is indispensable for the convenience of treatment. In
such
 a proposed
development
,
healthcare
Suggestion
health care
 service will become a cross-border service. Foreign doctors,
accordingly
, will advise patients and consult with their colleagues faster and more concise at no risk of misunderstanding due to translation's obstacles.
On the other hand
, choosing to speak the same
language
 with other nationalities arouses many
severse
intensely or extremely bad or unpleasant in degree or quality
severe
 problems to our cultural identity. Apparently,
language
 plays a pivotal role in protecting intangible cultural heritages which are traditional music, poems or sculptures.
These
Suggestion
Those
 which were created by our ancestors in writing might be forgotten if the
next
 generation
use
Suggestion
uses
 only a novel
language
 that fails to interpret these mentioned intangible assets. Following that, there will be no more remarkable cultures
such
 as Maya Civilization with Quiche and Yucatec, two ancient languages from the south and north respectively; or Vietnamese Nho-characters used in the Feudal Era in Vietnam. Confronted with
this
 predicted
development
, we can understand that it brings about both positive and negative effects to us. Personally, I lean towards the idea that
this
development
 is socially negative.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhanced
  • streamlining
  • diverse cultures
  • accelerate
  • exchange of information
  • erosion
  • linguistic diversity
  • dominance
  • unequal power dynamics
  • marginalizing
  • reinforce
  • economic benefits
  • reduced translation
  • diplomacy
  • acquisition
  • exacerbating
  • social inequalities
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