Some people believe that sport is an essential part of school life for children, while others feel it should be purely optional. Discuss these opposing views and give your own opinion.

Physical
exercise
have been proven
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has been proven
by scientists to be vital in the physical development and healthy living of the population. Physical activities, sports have played an important part in the development, mentally and physically of the partakers especially the
school
children as most people believe,
although
some don'
t
. I strongly agree that children who do engage in sporting activities have an edge over those who don'
t
. Sports as the name Intel's, is a physical
exercise
most
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
times involving the whole parts of the body as well as the mental
,
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,
the brain. When an individual engages in sporting activities they feel great and more energised to face the
next
activities.
For instance
, when I was in
school I
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school, I
do start my day with
exercise
, after which
I
of me or myself
my
bath and set-off for classes at the end of the day I see myself achieving more than those who don'
t
and
also
I accomplish more
on
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in
those days. If a person should engage in a sporting activity or not
,
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,
for some still remains optional
,
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,
to
them they
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them, they
believe and sees it that physical
exercise
is a waste of time as the children are there in the
school
for academic activities and nothing else.
For example
,
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,
most Morden schools in my country
do not have playing
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have not played
haven't played
do not play
don't play
aren't playing
are not playing
field
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the field
,
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,
so young scholars do follow a routine of home -
school
- home and over and over again without an atom of
exercise
in the
school
curriculum and some parents as well give the offspring no chance to
exercise
, sharing the same ideology with the teachers. In conclusion, the importance of physical
exercise
can not
can not
cannot
be thrown to the corner as it is essential for both the child's mental and physical development which shows in their academic results
,
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,
and
such
ones are
more healthier
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healthier
more healthy
than those who don'
t
and
finally
, they are less likely to be
obessed
used improperly or excessively especially drugs
abused
obese
.
Accept space
.
Submitted by Serhio Baraniuk on

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