Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at best these methods are ineffective and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Alternative
medicine
is not new. It is accepted that it has predated conventional
medicine
and is still used only many people all around the world. In my opinion, I am unconvinced that traditional
medicine
is dangerous and feel that both conventional and traditional
medicine
can be useful. Reasons why the conventional medical community is often dismissive for alternatives are several.
Firstly
, there has been very little scientific research in the fields of
alternative
methods of treatment resulting in scarcity of evidence to support the claims of their supporters.
Secondly
,
this
form of
medicine
is recommended by family or
friends which
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friends, which
in turn adds positive attitude and can be one of the reasons for the cure with
alternative
therapy.
Also
, it is used for long-term chronic illnesses and
therefore
acute medical conditions need conventional medical treatment.
In contrast
,
alternative
therapies have recorded very few or little side-effects, far away from being dangerous.
As a
result it
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result, it
can not
can not
cannot
be life-threatening.
In other words
, there has been a lot of anecdotal evidence from people who underwent these procedures that these therapies work.
For example
, there are a lot of people in the western countries who are ready to pay for
alternative
forms of medicines,
eventhough
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even though
the government provides free conventional medicines. So it is always thoughtful that people would pay only if these therapies will be helpful. I strongly believe that conventional
medicine
and
alternative
therapies can and should co-exist. They have different strengths and can
bot
two things or people together
both
be useful to target particular medical problems. The best situation would be for
alternative
therapies to be used to support and complement conventional
medicine
.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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