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Without capital punishment our lives are less secure and crimes or violence increase. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#punishment #lives #crimes #violence
Serious crimes need capital punishment so that the offender
are
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will be
is
 unable to get involved in the crime in the future.
However
, If they want to stop the acts of violation in the
future
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future, then
then
 it would be better to forget him and judge him for a change
.
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.
 Recently, the demands of natural resources have risen dramatically across the world due to population growth. Some people state that we have not enough resources.
However
, there are some individuals who disagree with
this
 opinion. In
this
 essay, the issues behind
this
 phenomenon will be examined. On the one hand, some people state that if the number of natural
resource
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resources
 will continue to
degrease
decrease in size, extent, or range
decrease
 we cannot have a comfortable life because natural resources are limited. According to a government research in the USA shows that if
this
 situation will continue, the petrol will lose in 2050.
Moreover
, it is widely said that the number of population in the world will increase.
This
 will make the amount of natural resource decrease.
On the other hand
, there are some individuals who disagree with
above
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the above
-mentioned perception. The demands of natural resources will be
lessen
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lessened
 owning to improving the technology.
For example
, the developments of technology
such
 as electronic cars gave a positive impact in the society. By using
this
, we can decline the consumption of natural resources. Eventually, we will not need natural fuel. In my opinion, decreasing of natural resource is quite crisis, I think the loss of it give a negative impact in the society because even we won’t have a comfortable life any more. In conclusion, I agree with the idea that there
is
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are
 no longer enough natural resources to sustain
this
 situation. In order to
defense
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defend
defence
define
 our life, the governments every
countries
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country
 should tackle
this
 issue.
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