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Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

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It is certainly said that learning is an ongoing process
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Every person
learn
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learns
 something new according to their age, experience, knowledge and education. According to my point of
view it
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view, it
 is always better to have
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teacher
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a teacher
 or guide for study. One
teacher
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 has adequate knowledge to teach their
student
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students
. He knows all the possible ways to make
subject easier
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the subject easier
 for the students,
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, he teaches them in an effective manner.
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, some students are weak in some
subjects but
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subjects, but
 a
teacher
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always guides
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has always guided
 them according to their mental capacity. He teaches them as fun. Some people can learn better in group by
discuss
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discussing
 the topics with others. In class people can know the views of others, even they know how we can learn effectively. Where the
teacher
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 always gives an easy direction to learn. In the today’s competitive world, everybody is busy, some people think that rather to waste their time to go for classes they can learn better their subject _. They can attend online classes by using the Internet at home. They can get relevant information from the Internet regarding their topic. There is not
specific time
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a specific time
 or age limit to learn something new. Some new things we can only learn from experience –
for example
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 new facts, new habits and so on.
In
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To
 sum up, I would like to say that it is always better for the people to have a
teacher
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 because a
teacher
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 has good knowledge, experience and is educated how to teach others. People will learn from a
teacher
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 in an easier way rather than on their own.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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