Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.

Any type of media
coverage we
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coverage, we
come across certainly has some impact on
any one
any person
anyone
who watches it or comes across. As far as children are
concerned they
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concerned, they
are more vulnerable to
such
coverage. Now the question is, is
this
having a negative effect on children?
Well certainly
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Well, certainly
so. Children tend to imitate and follow
celebreties
Suggestion
the celebrities
celebrities
. Any news related to
celebreties
a widely known person
celebrities
celebrate
are broadcasted
Suggestion
is broadcast
. The channels are not responsible for broadcasting just positive or appealing news. Now-a-days, there are many negative news related to
celebrites
a widely known person
celebrities
for
eg
: Court cases, divorces,
money
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
battles, Sucides
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
which
defintely
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
defiantly
have a bad effect on children.
Celebreties
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Celebrities
are treated as idols. And
such
news
surely have
Suggestion
surely has
a
disheartning
destructive of morale and self-reliance
disheartening
effect on children. The bad part is
kids
Suggestion
the kids
do not
openely
in an open way
openly
speak about
such
impact on them
whith
expresses the means used
with
their parents and so it is too difficult to understand how far has it
impacted
Suggestion
Impacted
a child's behaviour.

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