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Nowadays people believe that social networking sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is evident that social media has widened its horizons over the
last
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 few years, whose widespread usage is putting detrimental effect not only on users but on society, as a whole. I completely agree with the statement that sites like Facebook, Twitter and Instagram are influencing people around the globe in a negative way. While on the
surface it
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surface, it
 seems social networking brings people together across the Internet, in a larger sense it may create social isolation and even addiction. As people prefer to spend amounts of time on social networks,
hence
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 experiencing less face-to-face interaction which is promoting device dependency and several health issues like hyper-networking and hyper-texting which sometimes turns as severe as mental depression in math's. According to a survey it is found that the primary reason of separation among couples is spending more time on social network
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 of creating a harmony in relation.
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, social media provides a platform that
facilitate
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facilitates
 users to spread news worldwide on a single click.
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,
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 facility is causing harm that any misinformation by miscreants can be easily shared globally without any
authentication which
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authentication, which
 sometimes cause the irreparable harm to the reputations.
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, disrespectful comments and posts about a sensitive matter put ill-effects on the victim. A study showed that most of the suicides were
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happening
 only because of bullying on the Internet. In summary, daily overuse of these social sites not only tends to have negative consequences on the health and mental well-being of an
individual but
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individual, but
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 promoting isolation in society and sharing irrelevant information without any facts harming the dignity of others.
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