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COMPUTERS ARE BECOMING AN ESSENTIAL PART OF EDUCATION. DISCUSS THE ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINION.

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As part of the
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 assignment, computers are becoming the requirement. In my opinion, it is beneficial to children as today the average person's work-life resolves around computers and exposing younger people to the
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 early in
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 prepares them for the future. The most prominent advantage is children get access to the Global
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, which help them in understanding and learning better. On
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the other hand
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, sometimes they get distracted easily by social media and
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 gaming. Using the
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 at schools, children can access Global libraries like the online video tutorial,
FAQ forums,
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FAQ, forums,
 free e-books and they can grasp on fundamental concepts easily. Without the
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, students have to rely only on books and tutorials given in the classroom, and if they have any other doubts or if they don't understand
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the material
 easily, they get only limited help. But
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the Internet
 has truly opened up the whole world to them, and they get the infinite amount of information.
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, for any single math or science problem, they can find many different ways to solve it.
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 to that, using forum they can interact with people having
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the same issues
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the contrary
, using the
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 brings distractions, for examples,
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 gaming, and social media, which hinders their progress on studies. While using the
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, it is very easy to get off track as it offers many other functionalities. When using study with paper and pen, focus comes easily. One of the examples of
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 is, when using the
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 for doing an assignment,
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the children
 end up checking their emails, playing a bit of game and checking their social media, as these functionalities are readily available. If the same assignment is done using Paper- pen, it gets done correctly.
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 there are some disadvantages to using too much
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 at
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, they outweigh advantages as
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 skills are helpful in selecting good career options and maintaining high profile jobs. Today, around 80% - 90% job requires more or less of
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 work,
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 learning
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 skills at
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 level is really beneficial. To summarize, using the
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 at
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 may cause the distraction to study, but in later like having good
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 skills are undeniable to any career options.
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