The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society.

I agree with the premise. The explosion of the middle class resulted in a requirement for avenues where they can spend their hard earned money usually for relaxation purposes. Shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
are one
such
avenue that
provide
Suggestion
provides
them with options to pursue latest trends, entertain themselves and utilise their leisure
time
. But
should the
Suggestion
should the time spend
should the time spent
time
spent be
regualted
controlled or governed according to rule or principle or law
regulated
refuted
relegated
? Yes, the amount of
time
todays youth spends in the shopping centre is negatively affecting them
.
Accept space
.
The mindless spending on
unnessary
not necessary
unnecessary
items in order to be fashionable and in sync with the latest trends means that our youth is forgetting the value of money, and is increasingly becoming unaware of the difficulties the previous generation has faced due to the lack of hard cash. Today it has become a habit of our youths to not give any importance to understanding whether the products that they buy are worth the prices they are paying for it and whether they truly require the product that they purchase. They
dont
do not
don't
understand the diamond-water paradox. Our youths today have forgotten the value of
time
. Mindlessly spending a large chunk of their
time
window shopping or pursuing other
actvities
any specific behavior
activities
in the shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
when it is not
an
Suggestion
a
requirement, our youths are not utilising their
time
to improve their
personalites
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
and their skills. Resulting in our youths being sheep, devoid of any personalities or transferable skills that can help them secure a comfortable future. Their leisure
time
would be well spent reading
,
Accept space
,
painiting
graphic art consisting of an artistic composition made by applying paints to a surface
painting
or engaging in sports activities. These
expereinces
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
will stay with them
liftime
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
lifetimes
lifting
rather than the products that
the
people in general
they
buy from the store that will not
last
them more than a year.
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