The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centers. It is feared that this trend can bring negative influences on the youths and the society.

I agree with the premise. The explosion of the middle class resulted in a requirement for avenues where they can spend their hard earned money usually for relaxation purposes. Shopping
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
Centers
centers
are one
such
avenue that
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provides
provide
them with options to pursue latest trends, entertain themselves and utilise their leisure
time
. But
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should the time spend
should the time spent
should the
time
spent be
controlled or governed according to rule or principle or law
regulated
refuted
relegated
regualted
? Yes, the amount of
time
todays youth spends in the shopping centre is negatively affecting them
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.
.
The mindless spending on
not necessary
unnecessary
unnessary
items in order to be fashionable and in sync with the latest trends means that our youth is forgetting the value of money, and is increasingly becoming unaware of the difficulties the previous generation has faced due to the lack of hard cash. Today it has become a habit of our youths to not give any importance to understanding whether the products that they buy are worth the prices they are paying for it and whether they truly require the product that they purchase. They
do not
don't
dont
understand the diamond-water paradox. Our youths today have forgotten the value of
time
. Mindlessly spending a large chunk of their
time
window shopping or pursuing other
any specific behavior
activities
actvities
in the shopping
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
center
when it is not
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a
an
requirement, our youths are not utilising their
time
to improve their
the complex of all the attributes--behavioral, temperamental, emotional and mental--that characterize a unique individual
personalities
personalites
and their skills. Resulting in our youths being sheep, devoid of any personalities or transferable skills that can help them secure a comfortable future. Their leisure
time
would be well spent reading
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,
,
graphic art consisting of an artistic composition made by applying paints to a surface
painting
painiting
or engaging in sports activities. These
the accumulation of knowledge or skill that results from direct participation in events or activities
experiences
expereinces
will stay with them
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
lifetimes
lifting
liftime
rather than the products that
people in general
they
the
buy from the store that will not
last
them more than a year.

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