Some people think that the media have to right to publish detail of people’s view, while other thinks it should be controlled. Discuss both views.

While some persons assumed that
media have right
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the media have a right
the media have right
to publish
detail
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details
of their private view other thinks that it should be controlled. In the following paragraphs both views
are discuss
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are discussed
are discussing
.
First
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The first
and predominant reason is motivation. Media
share
celebrities those things that are good for
community
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the community
. So that these materials have a great impact on our youngster and
this
information are helpful for us.
For instance
publish that points those are related with our nation. There are many NGO’s who always ready
for
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to
help the needy persons
.
Accept space
.
They always ready to help for all religions and countries and there
this
dedication remove the discrimination. If
there
of them or themselves
their
work
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work, share
share
through
media
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the media, then
the media then
then
people
now
be cognizant or aware of a fact or a specific piece of information; possess knowledge or information about
know
about them and youth will motivate from them that improve the moral values and ethics of the boys and girls.
Furthermore it
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Furthermore, it
is the main cause of crime.
Mostly
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Most
individuals
share
their personal life through social media for fame. Sometime its wrong impact on our new generation because
mostly
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most
criminal hack their accounts and stolen their photos and other important documents.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
are blackmail
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are blackmailing
have blackmailed
by those criminals and demand for money. When people did not
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their
demands
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demands, then
then
theft edit their photos and
share
in different sites that effect on the life of
youngster
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a youngster
. In
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
ecapulates
that famous personalities attached with our nations via good thinking. I agree to media have right to
share
the personal life of specific persons not at all’s and
share
important and meaningful data of famous persons who should motivate our youth and impact on
nation’s development
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a nation’s development
the nation’s development
in
well
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good
manners.
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