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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this?

#people #home #workplace #place
It is argued that keeping the surrounding
environment both
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environment, both
 at
work
 and at home when the things are always placed
at
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in
 their own slots is a crucial.
This
 essay totally agrees with that statement because behaving in that way helps save time at
work
 and keep house clean and safe. When the workplace
been maintained clean
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has been maintained, clean
has been maintained clean
was maintained clean
is being maintained clean
has been maintaining clean
 and well organized it takes effect on the trade productivity. Worker always knows where the needed tool is and he will not spend
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 time for finding it.
Also
 the tools before being
putted
put into a certain place or abstract location
put
petted
 to their places are always
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 checked
therefore
 they are ready to use at any time.
For example
, in the car
workshops tools
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workshops, tools
workshop tools
workshop workshop tools
such
 as screwdrivers and wrenches are always sorted by type and size and mechanics always know where
tools
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the tools
 are. Keeping order at home is
also
 very important thing because the place where human lives should be clean and safe. Clothes, dishes, supplies, and everything else of household staff must be placed where it should be right after it was used because
otherwise
 it will cause disorder and difficulties with finding things or even it could be dangerous if kids will find a knife which would be laying on the desk
instead
 of drawer.
For example
, I am once
had
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having
came
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come
 too late to the meeting at
work
 because I could not find my tie which eventually was found at my wife’s closet. In conclusion, it is crucial to keep order at both
work
 and home environment because it makes our life more productive, comfortable and safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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