More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

One difficult issue well-developed countries face today is
majority
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the majority
of people are developing obesity at
very young age
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a very young age
. I am going to present reasons and results of being overweight. There are various causes that contribute to
this
problem.
Firstly
, children who develop unhealthy food habits are at a greater risk of getting obesity.
Secondly
, the evolution of smart phones and televisions is making children to addict to them and
as a result
they are not involved in physical
labor
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
.
Lastly
, heredity is
also
playing a major role in developing obesity in family members. Being obese leads to numerous health issues which include cardiovascular diseases, high cholesterol levels, diabetes, spine problems, etc.
which
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Which
decreases the life expectancy rate. There are disastrous implications posed by
this
problem
to
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in
the developed countries where people retire earlier in their middle age.
Consequently
, public and private sector corporations are facing tremendous challenges in retaining senior talent in service and thereby decrease in GDP. To conclude,
overweighed
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
children develop health-hazardous issues which indirectly affect the
nations
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nation's
growth.
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