You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Shyam. I am from Hyderabad. I have recently checked your brochure
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a one-week

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walking tour in mountains and am writing to you to know more information about the
. Since my childhood, I have been thrilled to take part in walking trips in
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the mountains

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which gives me a fresh breath of air and refreshment that gives a break from my daily chores. I wonder if you could provide me
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with more

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information about the tour
as the start and end dates, the cost it incurs, things to carry and any important information to know ahead of the
, there are few concerns about my fitness level that I would like to express and get your advice before committing the
. I have been not part of
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this kind
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of trips for a while due to my busy schedules at work,
I am not training physically these days.
As a result
, my fitness levels are down and I am wondering if I can keep up the
. It would be great if you let me know what level of fitness is needed to make the
successful. Awaiting your reply. Yours Faithfully P Shyam Kumar
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