People living in large cities face several problems. What are these problems? Should governments encourage people to move to smaller towns?

Residents of urban cities come across
wide range
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a wide range
of problems in day to day
life
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life, such
such
as water scarcity, traffic and so on. I do strongly agree that
government
on its part
government
should cheer people spreading out to
decongest
the urban areas.
Firstly with
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Firstly, with
whopping number of people moving to metros, natural resource scarcity is deepening everyday thereby directly influencing the cost of living and stress levels. Research in
Capital city
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the Capital city
by Delhi Metropolitan Development Board in India shows fresh
water which
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water, which
was freely flowing years back,
were
we are
we're
now sold at a price. Coupled with increased use of automobiles and construction activities, pollution has spiraled to new heights leading to erratic weather changes. A
bitter
(comparative of 'good') superior to another (of the same class or set or kind) in excellence or quality or desirability or suitability; more highly skilled than another
better
outcome is that clean air is now being packaged and sold.
Furthermore
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Furthermore, this
this
is
turn
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turning
, affects both green environment and human well-being as noticeable with increased spending on medications and drugs.
Thus
governments should aid dispersing
the high
Suggestion
higher
density in urban areas.
This
can be done by providing incentives and encouraging to pick jobs locally. One
such
good initiative was taken by
Australian
Suggestion
the Australian government
Australian governments
government
by cutting down taxes on income generated in remote locations and
also
by providing scholarships for opting distance educations. To conclude,
benefits
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the benefits
of living in large cities are
undeniable but
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undeniable, but
it has its own drawbacks. I do believe
its
it is
it's
the responsibility of the
government
to look after the people's welfare. Successful migration depends on availability of right opportunities and facilities.
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