Some people believe that governments should spend on new public buildings, such as libraries and museums, rather than renovating old buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

We live in
materialistic world
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a materialistic world
the materialistic world
. In
this
modern
era it
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era, it
is important to preserve our culture as well our historical buildings. Some people believe that it is very important to
government
should spend more money for new construction.
However
,
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
claim that
government
should more pay on historical building. I will discuss both the view in my following paragraphs.
First
and foremost, people should recognize that
government
should invest their money to construct
new building
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new buildings
a new building
,
such
as libraries, museums and some other. Because day by day pollution is increasing and it requires more new places for the studies, refreshments and some other. To illustrate
this
point, I would like to mention that in India
government
should build many facilities for the public. Due to that folk live
better life
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better lives
compare to
past
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the past
. As an example, Indian
government
build new schools, public toilets,
new railway station
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a new railway station
and some other. So that people connect with others as well. Emphasizing on the other point of view, these are
numberous
an illegal daily lottery
numbers
numerous
arguments in the support of the idea that maintain our
mounments
a structure erected to commemorate persons or events
monuments
moments
, buildings, museums and other is
also
important. These are
also
an essential part of increase the economy of any country. As we all know, ‘each and every cloud has
it’s
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
silver lining’. A specific example of
this
is that India had ‘The Taj Mahal.’
which
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Which
one is very well. India
earn
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earns
handsome income from it and attracts the people whole over the world.
In essence taking
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In essence, taking
everything into account, I pen
down saying
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down, saying
that,
this
is a topic which raises strong passions on both sides of
arguments
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the arguments
.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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