Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Due to the development of mass media
such
as televisions and internet, celebrities can now reach
wider range
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a wider range
of audiences and kids are not an exemption. In that sense, many believe that
this
scenario can have detrimental effects on children. In my opinion, I agree
to
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with
this
claim and I the reason for
this
will be discussed in
this
essay. A plethora of celebrities
promote
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promotes
certain beauty and personality standards
into
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in
the media. Since modern media
covers
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cover
almost everything about
celebrities
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celebrity
celebrity's
lifestyle, their influence on certain aspects
such
as beauty standards can reach sensitive audiences
such
as
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
.
As a result
, many youths will force themselves to imitate their idols to fit
in
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into
the celebrities' traditional criteria of beauty even though it
is has
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has
has had
is having
negative impacts on them.
For example
, children in the Philippines sometimes wear revealing clothes even though it is not appropriate and they do
this kinds
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this kind
these kinds
of actions because it is what they see on media outlets which broadcasts famous people
In addition
, media coverage of celebrities can create drawbacks when these kinds of people commit
inapproriate
not suitable for a particular occasion etc
inappropriate
actions
such
as
sexual offence
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a sexual offence
sexual offences
and violent behaviours. Since these prominent people are influential, they can give children a reason to
also
commit unsuitable acts.
For instance
, after the media releases the news about a famous
man in who
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man who
commits sexual acts against a girl, there has been some records in which children
recreates
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recreate
similar events based on what has been broadcast. To sum it all up
,
Accept space
,
although
media coverage of celebrities
are
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is
common nowadays, there are drawbacks in specific audiences
such
as children. Since the youngs don't have enough maturity and experience, they can be easily influenced
on
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by
what they see in different media outlets.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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