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Some people believe that governments should make the ​investment in building public libraries in every town, while others think it is a waste of money because we have access to information via the Internet. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As budget pressures felt
by
Suggestion
in
 the publicly funded system are increasing, there has been much discussion about whether the government should allocate an enormous amount of
money
 to the maintenance of public libraries in every city or not. While I accept that there are benefits and drawbacks of
this
 decision, I would argue that it is better not to invest. On the one hand, the value of public libraries in popularizing education cannot be underestimated.
Firstly
, libraries, as is pervasively known, provide fair access for the public to gain knowledge and skills regardless of how old they are, how much they earn and whether they are educated or not. To some extent, libraries are like the land of opportunity, where anyone can become educated and can realize their dream of personal success.
Secondly
, not all the books can
digitized
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digitize
, particularly those old books, and public libraries contain a wide range of materials available to be borrowed for free.
For example
, old books, audiovisual or limited edition materials are often hard to find on the Internet; these can only be found in libraries.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is wasteful
money
 to finance in building public libraries.
First
, people can search for the knowledge they want to acquire and read e-books via the Internet easily.
For instance
, users only put some key-words, and all related information will come up eventually within a few seconds.
Furthermore
, viewed from the angle of economics, fund public libraries need a vast amount of
money
 but cannot bring any economic return.
In particular
, the administrations should spend
money
 to build schools, hospitals…, which both bring social and economic value. In conclusion,
although
 both using public libraries and connecting to knowledge through the Internet are advantageous in their own ways, it seems to me that it is better to not fund a large amount of
money
 in building public libraries.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • community hubs
  • access to physical resources
  • redundant
  • digital divide
  • lifelong learning
  • educational support
  • environmental impact
  • data centers
  • preservation
  • historical documents
  • intellectual freedom
  • digital infrastructure
  • diverse needs
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