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Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Modern
technology
 is flourishing by leaps and bounds, which brings significant efforts in our daily communications. As
the
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time passed by,
communication
 through
letters
 has been reduced because of vast
improvement
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 in telecommunications. I agree with the given statement and the reasons are demystified below.
To begin
 with, in
present
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era
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technology
 plays a vital role in everyone’s life. As it is escalated the distance between the people is reduced.
Consequently
, the mode of
communication
 with human beings has changed dramatically. Through new advancements
of
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platform
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platforms
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such
 as email,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
Whatsapp
and Facebook,
the
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information
 can
be send
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 in
short
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 span of time
across
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the world but
this
 was not the case when
letters
 were used.
For Instance
, in
early
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 1990’s, my father used to send
letters
 to share
information
 and it used to take 4 to 5 days to reach the destination but now my father is using
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email and other social media applications
instead
 of
letters
 for faster
communication
.
Furthermore
, modern
communication
 provides various ways to connect with dear ones, who are staying far away using text and voice messages, voice calls and video calls.
As a result
, people can feel their loved ones presence around them.
Nevertheless
,
letters
 do not have the facility to feel the presence except
conveying
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 the
information
.
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, the usage of
letters
 will
demolish
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 as
the
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modern
technology
is taking
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 flight. To recapitulate,
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modern
technology
 is driving the world and making humans
to
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have better and faster
communication
platform
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platforms
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 to send
information
 within
short
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 period of time.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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