Some people say that zoos should be banned for being cruel towards the animals while others say they should be continued for protecting rare animals. Discuss both your views and give your opinion.

While some believe that zoos must be prohibited
for
Suggestion
from
treating animals insensitively,
however
,
others
Suggestion
Others
favour to retain them for
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
conservation
.
Accept space
.
I personally believe that rare animals Intro
can
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Can
only be saved from extinction when kept in zoos away from
effects
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the effects
of unfavourable
conditions
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Conditions
. On the one hand, proponents of cruelty free practices towards
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
believe that keeping
forest
the trees and other plants in a large densely wooded area
Forest
creatures in congested areas
is
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are
harsh.
For example
, Elephants cannot survive
comfortably
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Comfortably
in small enclosures
.
Accept space
.
Zoos may not perfectly replicate natural conditions suitable
for
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For
animal wellbeing
such
as adequate space for their free movement.
Hence
, these animals
would
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Would
not have suitable circumstances similar to their habitat. Resultantly, many rare species
could
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Could
die sooner than their natural
life-span
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifespan
, in artificial habitats
On the other hand
, zoo supporters insist on utility of
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
sanctuaries for conservation. They argue that a zoo serves as a shelter for shielding animals
such
as polar bears
,
Accept space
,
from
bitter
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Bitter
and abruptly changing climatic conditions.
In addition
, deforestation as a legacy of
increasing
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Increasing
human population leads to disappearing natural habitats for wild animals
.
Accept space
.
In
this
connection
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Connection
, carefully planned conservation programs would provide
suitable environment
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a suitable environment
,
temperature
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Temperature
, food, and health care which may enable animals to live healthy and grow in
numbers
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Numbers
. Australian Zoological research journal recently reported that giant pandas are
increasing
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Increasing
in numbers after successful intervention of human-controlled breeding for their
reproduction
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Reproduction
.
Therefore
, conserving animals in zoos in one of the best ways to save
species
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the species
from
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From
extinction. In conclusion,
although
some people think that zoos should be forbidden, I
,
Accept space
,
nevertheless
,
believe
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Believe
that they are worthwhile to save endangered species from extinction.
Thus
, zoo
authorities
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Authorities
should carefully regulate the procedures for animal care, so that
wild
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
life
sanctuaries
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Sanctuaries
can truly serve the purpose of animal protection.

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