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Advantages and disadvantages studying in universities

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As the time passed by, studying at tertiary colleges has been increased dramatically. Some people, believe that
this
 as a positive impact in the society.
However
, few think that the increase in students in universities is affecting the standard of
education
. Both have their pros and cons which are demystified below.
This
 has been a positive impact for both the individuals and the community for those who are studying at universities.
First
 of all, each one could pursue the career in the fields they dreamt of and are fascinated about.
For Instance
, Psychology, engineering, medicine etc.
Moreover
, people get good opportunities in terms of jobs, because the corporate world and the medical society’s
hires
Suggestion
hire
 more applicants with higher qualification and are paid well and
thus
 allow those people to lead a higher quality of life.
This
 helps to raise the standard of
leaving
the experience of being alive; the course of human events and activities
living
 in the society through economic development.
Nevertheless
, the increased growth of students in tertiary colleges has some demerits as well. A growth in students leads to large classes and
thus
 teachers become often busy to provide attention to their students. In some cases,
this
 could affect the quality of
education
.
Furthermore
, Studying in universities is a bit costly, few families might not afford the
education
 of their children.
For example
, the semester fee of Engineering is $30,000 at-the University of
Castle which
Accept comma addition
Castle, which
 becomes a burden to their families. To recapitulate, educations at universities provide a significant and positive step in a person's life.
Therefore
, it should be available for everyone.
However
, tertiary colleges should ensure the quality of
education
 they provide to students is not compromised by the growth.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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