Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

There has been an ongoing debate whether children should be taught to be competitive or to work with their friends and classmates. While healthy rivalry could help children to become a stronger person, being co-operative make them a better
one
. On the
one
hand, a friendly competition among students in
one
class would benefit all of them. Since almost everyone wants to be the most outstanding, setting a competitive atmosphere would motivate them to study even
more harder
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harder
. As a short-term result, each learner would have not only made a faster progress on his
study but
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study, but
there would
also
be a positive impact on the class-wide grade.
Moreover
, a graduate should be prepared with self-confidence and the experiences of competing with his old classmates before facing the adult life
that is
full of challenges. Because getting a job or maintaining a position in the company is nowhere near a pleasant competition.
On the other hand
, the sense of co-operation is even more important in the society life. Since most of the children now will be expected to work in a team later when they are hired, it is necessary to know how to collaborate with other people.
For example
, an employee needs to follow his boss’s instructions and co-operate with his teammates to solve the problems and benefit the company. As
one
famous quote said “If you want to go fast, go alone. If you want to go far, go together”, teamwork is the key to achieve more success in the future. After all, there has been no high achievers in the world that could work solo without receiving support from their assistants.
Therefore
, teachers should encourage
this
kind of attitude during the classes as giving out questions and projects that require students to discuss in pairs or small groups. In conclusion, while a spirit of competitiveness would get children higher grades at school, I believe co-operation is more essential in long-term targets.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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