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In many countries, very few young people read newspapers or follow the news on TV. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#countries #people #newspapers #news #tv
These days people are becoming
less interesting
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less interested
 in reading in general
,
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,
and especially newspaper
.
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.
No matter which country they came from they mostly prefer to use the internet
.
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.
However
.In my opinion, I believe that one of the causes is because newspapers are not
interesting
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interested
 any more. Especially, for
young
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younger
 generations who likes more to read about musicians or artist
for example
. Which might be mentioned in the
newespaper but
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newspaper, but
newspaper but
newspapers but
 not that much as they want it to be
.
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.
We can have a
newespapers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspaper
 which
concentrate
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concentrates
 more on these topics to encourage people to read more.
Also
,
besides
 that now we can read about anything, just by look up in our phones or
laptops it is
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laptops, it is
 easier than buying a newspaper
everyday
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every day
.
Furthermore
, we can only concentrate on topics that we prefer. Indeed, these web sites can not be trusted, unlike the
newespapers
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
newspaper
 which is considered cheaper than news
websites we
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websites, we
 can inform people about the possible risk for these websites and the effect of fake news on
socity
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 and that the
newespaper
a daily or weekly publication on folded sheets; contains news and articles and advertisements
newspapers
newspaper
 are more
truastble
Manageable; tractable; hence, moderate; not violent
treatable
 than web sites.
In addition
, the size of the newspapers can become a hindrance. Normally, the size can make it harder to read on the bus or in the coffee shop.If we can reduce the size and make it easier for people to carry it with them its will
makes
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make
meny
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 people read more in any place so the number of
newsapers
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newspaper
newspapers
 reader will
increas
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
. In conclusion, we can induce people to read
newspaper
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the newspaper
newspapers
a newspaper
 by except their interest and try to focus
in
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on
 what attract them the most.
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