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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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The number of people who are visiting places with extreme climatic conditions like the Antarctica and the Sahara Desert have been increasing like never before. There are pros and cons for the tourists, who are willing to visit
such
 locations. Lets us start with
pros
Suggestion
the pros
,
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 who go to
such
 places will see and experience the nature’s beauty in its raw form. They will be able to feel how it is like to lead a
life
 in
such
 tough environments and when they return to home, the moments will be cherished for
life
. Going through
such
 an adventurous and treacherous journey will improve self-confidence and sense of achievement. The main disadvantage of
going
Suggestion
going to such places
such
 places is poor safety. Since the conditions are extreme, without proper gear, it can be
life
threating
threatening or foreshadowing evil or tragic developments
threatening
, in most
cases emergency
Suggestion
cases, emergency
cases emergencies
cases emergencies emergencies
 medical help is always far from reach. As per the statistics, dehydration in desert areas due to extremely hot weather is the main cause of death.
Similarly
, in Antarctica the temperature is always way below zero degrees, these freezing conditions can lead to frost bites and in some cases it can be death. Apart from Antarctica and Sahara they many other places which dangerous for the humans to travel. Taking Himalayas as an example, Mount Everest is the famous mountain on earth due to its height.
Travelers
Suggestion
Travellers
Travels
Travelling
, whoever reaches the top will turn
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 celebrities, as it is one of the unforgiving
peak
Suggestion
peaks
 to concur. At the same time, many people lost
life
 while trying to scale that peak. Since Everest is almost 28000 feet, oxygen levels will be low,
this
 can lead to death, if the person is not properly trained and equipped.
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