Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Other, however believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Children
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talent citizens
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talent, citizens
for society are deemed different point of views. Personally, the educating for children always requires
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a close combination
the close combination
of the school and family because children need to develop their personality
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comprehension
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with, what holds the most importance is that parents have obligations and responsibilities to their children as the family is where children are born, grow up and form their personality so that the impact of family
education
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on children is
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and earliest.
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, children enjoying family party with relatives would will learn how to treat beloved people as well as respect family value.
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, building
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appropriate lifestyle to promote the positive aspects of children is extremely vital. Because adults keep
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an exemplary role
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the family
and society as well as mentor children involving a lot of complex social relationships.
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, the school has the main function of training specific knowledge for children thanks to
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the teachers
. Specifically, children are improved IQ and EQ by the comprehensive
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journey from primary to higher system. What is more, physical
education
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program helps them grow up health and social skills, leading to generate convenient condition for improving their brain mindset. To illustrate, research results of American scientists said that exercise helps children have not only a healthy
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body, but
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better child's brain, especially in acquiring information and memory ability To sum up, every
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child
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needs
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education
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of
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both parents and school for entirely
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developmentally
. Building talent young generation should be invested precisely for the purpose of nationwide sustainable development in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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