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Some people think that instead of preventing climate change, we need to find a way to live with it. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In recent decades, global warming has been receiving a great deal of media attention around the world due to its substantial impacts on human life.
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 the idea of coexistence between
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 and humans appears reasonable,
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 cannot be viewed as the ultimate approach for humankind to combat
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. There are a number of reasons why the coexistence can do more harm than good.
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,
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 is largely shaped by human-caused
geoengineering
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
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 rather than nature itself.
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, in order to produce the energy that drives the world’s economy, most nations rely on carbon- rich fuels like coal, oil and gas, which directly correlates with the intensification of global warming.
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, even if citizens agree to keep the environment the way it is, corporations, especially in the manufacturing and mining industries, would not as that would affect their profits.
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, it can be implied that if corporations were not held accountable for their contribution to global warming as in the case of coexistence, the issue of
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 would inevitably be exacerbated. It
is more economically sound
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more economically sounds
 to actively prevent
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 than to ignore it. In fact, the costs, either financial or non-financial, of dealing with future consequences of
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 can be overwhelming.
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, the increase in intensity and frequency of storms can cause massive destructions and deaths in many coastal areas, which would take decades to recover.
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, rising temperatures have
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 contributed to the extinction of species worldwide. It should be noted that the extinction is irreversible and comes at great cost to the ecosystem and apparently humans living within it. In conclusion, actively combating global warming must be regarded as top priority given
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the highest
 urgency. Governments and corporations worldwide should take steps to ensure that
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 remains at bay.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • prevent
  • adaptation
  • mitigation
  • cope with
  • effects
  • shift
  • mindset
  • lifestyle
  • balance
  • invest
  • research
  • technology
  • crucial
  • education
  • awareness
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