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People in many countries have to spend more and more time away from their home. Why is this? What are the effects on people themselves and their families?

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It is true that in many countries a feature of modern life is that people tend to spend more time away from
home
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. While some reasons can be identified to explain
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 trend, the effects on individuals and their families must be considered as largely negative. There are two very important factors that influence many people to be away from
home
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 for longer.
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, contemporary economic realities
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has transformed
 men’s working lives. One inevitable consequence of the new global economy is the disappearance of traditional ways of life, so that individuals now have to seek far and wide to find
work
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 to support their family or to improve their job prospects.
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, in the search for a better standard of living, women are abandoning traditional patterns of behaviour, so that dual-income families and working mothers are becoming the norm. The family in which the mother stayed at
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 to look after the children is incompatible with modern aspirations for a better lifestyle, which can only be achieved by working longer hours. Both factors have important consequences for individuals and their families. Men who move away to
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 in another city, or even another country, often become economic migrants, labouring for a minimum wage or being forced to accept conditions of sweated labour.
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 they may
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 to send money
home
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 to their families, like many guest workers in the UK or Germany, the ties of kinship with their families are weakened. Women who go out to
work
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 full-time have less influence in shaping their children’s personality during a child’s formative years.
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, children may develop behavioural problems in the future. In conclusion, some reasons for
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 trend can readily be identified, and the consequences are far-reaching for individuals and their families.
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