Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Research has proven that lawbreakers

recieve

get something; come into possession of

receive

an inadequate degree of education. Many hold the opinion that, the most suitable way to lower criminal offences, is by teaching those in jail the skills they need to acquire employment after their release. I agree with

this

notion to a certain extent.

Firstly

, many people are sent to

prison

due to crimes

such

as, theft and joining gangs that participate in illegal activities.

This

is because, they did not graduate from school, let alone college, to obtain the tools that they need to make money in an honest way.

For instance

, 2019 Statistics obtained from

prison

research revealed that 80% of criminal offences are committed by uneducated individuals who have no other options to put food on their tables except by committing these acts.

Therefore

, educating these delinquent's during the time that they spent locked up, paves a way for them to

recieve

get something; come into possession of

receive

income without breaking the law. Overall,

this

leads to a reduction in illegal activities.

However

, let us not ignore the fact that some

law-breakers

someone who violates the law

lawbreakers

are well educated. Which means that, the acts they

committ

perform an act, usually with a negative connotation

commit

are not driven by a lack of education, in fact they are driven by hate.

Although

they have spent time in

prison

for their acts, their mentality remains the same, especially if they are part of a cult. In these situations, no amount of knowledge can prevent them from repeating their offences again.

For example

, people who are part of racist organizations like the KKK, will continue to kill black humans as they believe they are entitled to their cause. Undoubtedly, the application of teaching schemes in

prison

's will not uplift the burden of their crimes once their jail time is up. In conclusion, despite the many wrongdoer's that would refrain from criminal acts, once they are released from captivity, if they were to be taught imperative working skills, there are

also

those who already posses these skills and continue to cause havoc.

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Accurate linking words

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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