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Studies show that criminals get low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Research has proven that lawbreakers
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 an inadequate degree of education. Many hold the opinion that, the most suitable way to lower criminal offences, is by teaching those in jail the skills they need to acquire employment after their release. I agree with
this
 notion to a certain extent.
Firstly
, many people are sent to
prison
 due to crimes
such
 as, theft and joining gangs that participate in illegal activities.
This
 is because, they did not graduate from school, let alone college, to obtain the tools that they need to make money in an honest way.
For instance
, 2019 Statistics obtained from
prison
 research revealed that 80% of criminal offences are committed by uneducated individuals who have no other options to put food on their tables except by committing these acts.
Therefore
, educating these delinquent's during the time that they spent locked up, paves a way for them to
recieve
get something; come into possession of
receive
 income without breaking the law. Overall,
this
 leads to a reduction in illegal activities.
However
, let us not ignore the fact that some
law-breakers
someone who violates the law
lawbreakers
 are well educated. Which means that, the acts they
committ
perform an act, usually with a negative connotation
commit
 are not driven by a lack of education, in fact they are driven by hate.
Although
 they have spent time in
prison
 for their acts, their mentality remains the same, especially if they are part of a cult. In these situations, no amount of knowledge can prevent them from repeating their offences again.
For example
, people who are part of racist organizations like the KKK, will continue to kill black humans as they believe they are entitled to their cause. Undoubtedly, the application of teaching schemes in
prison
's will not uplift the burden of their crimes once their jail time is up. In conclusion, despite the many wrongdoer's that would refrain from criminal acts, once they are released from captivity, if they were to be taught imperative working skills, there are
also
 those who already posses these skills and continue to cause havoc.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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