In many parts of the world, families were larger in the past because people had more children. Do you think there were more advantages or disadvantages to being part of a large family in the past?

Over the past century, household size in various places around the world has declined considerably
as a result
of the social and historical changes. While I recognize some possible benefits of living in a big family, I consider it to be a serious drawback to children’s all-round development. Perhaps living with numerous siblings could benefit a child in many
ways
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ways, such
such
as high levels of brother-and-sister support and understanding among members of the family. Every kid had his or her own stories and at the end of the day, they could sit back, chat with each other, share their experiences or difficulties as well as find out appropriate solutions for their issues.
Furthermore
, spending time playing with other children in the family could greatly build up a strong spiritual bond among everyone. If
such
kids had any problems in life, they would always find a place to turn to, in
this
circumstance their ‘home’. Despite some potential benefits of big-sized families, I believe
such
households did more harm than good
to
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for
the growth of a young.
Firstly
, parents could not give sufficient care to all of their kids, especially at a time of economic crisis.
This
could lead to severe situations like hunger, conflicts or even wellbeing decline.
For example
, my dad was the oldest child of a large family and he had to work from a very young age to help to raise his bros and sis.
Secondly
, the interruption of education was
also
a grave concern for parents of huge households. Many school-age children got dropped out of school because of the lack of fund for paying fees and other costs.
This
appeared to hinder these children’s career
prospect
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prospects
in the long term. In summary, the positives of being a part of a large family by no mean outweigh its negatives as we consider factors of living expenses or education.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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