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Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

#teenagers #people #parents #time #work #children
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These days, it is a hot potato that parents are getting more
complain
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complains
 about their kids from schools, neighbourhood and relative that they are not acting well with others. A group of people thinking that guardians are the one who are mainly responsible for
this
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 cause because they are allocating more
time
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 to their work
instead
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 of looking after their children in the early age. I totally agree with
this
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 group of people and their suggestion. There are several reasons behind why parents are the main factor behind social mistakes of their children. One of them is,
children’s
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children
 misbehave with the elder people. Learning of respect does not come from the school, they need to be taught by own father and mother.
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, it is found in a survey that parents who raised and spend good
time
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 together with their school age children increase more respect for the elder person compare to
who
objective case of "who" ("who" is also often used in the objective)
whom
 not. Another reason is that, decreasing calmness nature in kids. People frequent receiving complain about
fight
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the fight
 or misbehave
in
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on
 the school for their children.
This
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 happens because of the teenager does require family oriented strictness towards their regular behaviour. It is possible if parents are engaging
for
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in
 good
time
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 with them, making understandably for the situation and explaining the pros and cons of bad behaviour.
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, in Canada, most of the students whose guardian are highly equipped with their work and not giving
time
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 for their
love
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loved
 one, are facing so much
troubles
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trouble
 in their routine and educational life. In conclusion, growing age requires so much attention towards kids and it only can be possible with their own parents. It will not only enhance their
ability but
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ability, but
also
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 helpful to maintain their good manners for the society.
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