Nowadays we see an increase in social problems involving teenagers. Many people believe that it is because parents spend more time at work and less with their children. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, it is a hot potato that parents are getting more
complain
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complains
about their kids from schools, neighbourhood and relative that they are not acting well with others. A group of people thinking that guardians are the one who are mainly responsible for
this
cause because they are allocating more
time
to their work
instead
of looking after their children in the early age. I totally agree with
this
group of people and their suggestion. There are several reasons behind why parents are the main factor behind social mistakes of their children. One of them is,
children’s
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children
misbehave with the elder people. Learning of respect does not come from the school, they need to be taught by own father and mother.
For example
, it is found in a survey that parents who raised and spend good
time
together with their school age children increase more respect for the elder person compare to
who
objective case of "who" ("who" is also often used in the objective)
whom
not. Another reason is that, decreasing calmness nature in kids. People frequent receiving complain about
fight
Suggestion
the fight
or misbehave
in
Suggestion
on
the school for their children.
This
happens because of the teenager does require family oriented strictness towards their regular behaviour. It is possible if parents are engaging
for
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in
good
time
with them, making understandably for the situation and explaining the pros and cons of bad behaviour.
For instance
, in Canada, most of the students whose guardian are highly equipped with their work and not giving
time
for their
love
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loved
one, are facing so much
troubles
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trouble
in their routine and educational life. In conclusion, growing age requires so much attention towards kids and it only can be possible with their own parents. It will not only enhance their
ability but
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ability, but
also
helpful to maintain their good manners for the society.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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