New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In many parts of the world. It is not uncommon to see the way
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a young generation
the young generation
young generation
spends their leisure time from outdoor to indoor activities due to the
a policy of intervening in the affairs of other countries
interference
indifference
inteference
of high-tech advancement. While it is true that there are certain benefits regarding
this
tendency, I am
convicticted
that the negative consequences overwhelming its positive
a distinct feature or element in a problem
aspects
aspetcs
. When it comes
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with
to
the advent of technology, the internet offers
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
schoolers
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
numberous
beneficial applications. In more
true confidential information
details
detail
detais
, a wide range of games, which carry educational aspects,
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is entered
are entered
in order to serve the youngster.
Therefore
,
this
not only
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children, to
child to
child child to
children to
release stress from intensive study, but
also
broaden their horizons within valuable knowledge. Turing to alternative side,
this
inclination assets various detrimental
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impact
impacts
on teenagers. The
first
drawback would be that the under-18s can be easily
giving or marked by complete attention to
engrossed
engrosed
in their private devices, which
expresses possibility
may
mau
distract them from studying.
As a result
, students might fall behind their study, causing the decline in academic performance. Another shortcoming stems from the mental and physical issues. Since children addicted
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to
in
the Internet, they would allocate more time to sit behind the screen rather than going out.
This
, thence,
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deprives
deprive
adolescents of their opportunities to social life, which makes them becomes more prone to passive-lifestyle diseases
such
as introvert and less confident in
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
comparasion
with others. In
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the long run
long run
,
this
action may negatively
have an effect upon
affect
effects
affects
affetc
on their adulthood, which could make them suffer from
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a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyles
sedentary lifestyle
. To recapitulate, albeit youngsters can
come into possession of
obtain
obatin
a host of merits from the Internet, they must avoid themselves from addicting to it.
Hence
, I
be in accord; be in agreement
concur
concut
with the notion that
this
attitude
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brings
v rings
vrings
more downsides to teenagers’ well-being as
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
well
welll
as study concentration.

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