New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

In many parts of the world. It is not uncommon to see the way
young generation
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a young generation
the young generation
spends their leisure time from outdoor to indoor activities due to the
inteference
a policy of intervening in the affairs of other countries
interference
indifference
of high-tech advancement. While it is true that there are certain benefits regarding
this
tendency, I am
convicticted
that the negative consequences overwhelming its positive
aspetcs
a distinct feature or element in a problem
aspects
. When it comes
to
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with
the advent of technology, the internet offers
schoolers
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
numberous
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
beneficial applications. In more
detais
true confidential information
details
detail
, a wide range of games, which carry educational aspects,
are entered
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is entered
in order to serve the youngster.
Therefore
,
this
not only
children to
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children, to
child to
child child to
release stress from intensive study, but
also
broaden their horizons within valuable knowledge. Turing to alternative side,
this
inclination assets various detrimental
impacts
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impact
on teenagers. The
first
drawback would be that the under-18s can be easily
engrosed
giving or marked by complete attention to
engrossed
in their private devices, which
mau
expresses possibility
may
distract them from studying.
As a result
, students might fall behind their study, causing the decline in academic performance. Another shortcoming stems from the mental and physical issues. Since children addicted
in
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to
the Internet, they would allocate more time to sit behind the screen rather than going out.
This
, thence,
deprive
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deprives
adolescents of their opportunities to social life, which makes them becomes more prone to passive-lifestyle diseases
such
as introvert and less confident in
comparasion
the act of examining resemblances
comparison
with others. In
long run
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the long run
,
this
action may negatively
affetc
have an effect upon
affect
effects
affects
on their adulthood, which could make them suffer from
sedentary lifestyle
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a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyles
. To recapitulate, albeit youngsters can
obatin
come into possession of
obtain
a host of merits from the Internet, they must avoid themselves from addicting to it.
Hence
, I
concut
be in accord; be in agreement
concur
with the notion that
this
attitude
vrings
take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
brings
v rings
more downsides to teenagers’ well-being as
welll
(often used as a combining form) in a good or proper or satisfactory manner or to a high standard ('good' is a nonstandard dialectal variant for 'well')
well
as study concentration.

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