New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
In many parts of the world. It is not uncommon to see the way
young generation
spends their leisure time from outdoor to indoor activities due to the Suggestion
a young generation
the young generation
inteference
of high-tech advancement. While it is true that there are certain benefits regarding a policy of intervening in the affairs of other countries
interference
indifference
this
tendency, I am convicticted
that the negative consequences overwhelming its positive aspetcs
.
When it comes a distinct feature or element in a problem
aspects
to
the advent of technology, the internet offers Suggestion
with
schoolers
a learned person (especially in the humanities); someone who by long study has gained mastery in one or more disciplines
scholars
numberous
beneficial applications. In more amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
detais
, a wide range of games, which carry educational aspects, true confidential information
details
detail
are entered
in order to serve the youngster. Suggestion
is entered
Therefore
, this
not only children to
release stress from intensive study, but Suggestion
children, to
child to
child child to
also
broaden their horizons within valuable knowledge.
Turing to alternative side, this
inclination assets various detrimental impacts
on teenagers. The Suggestion
impact
first
drawback would be that the under-18s can be easily engrosed
in their private devices, which giving or marked by complete attention to
engrossed
mau
distract them from studying. expresses possibility
may
As a result
, students might fall behind their study, causing the decline in academic performance.
Another shortcoming stems from the mental and physical issues. Since children addicted in
the Internet, they would allocate more time to sit behind the screen rather than going out. Suggestion
to
This
, thence, deprive
adolescents of their opportunities to social life, which makes them becomes more prone to passive-lifestyle diseases Suggestion
deprives
such
as introvert and less confident in comparasion
with others. In the act of examining resemblances
comparison
long run
, Suggestion
the long run
this
action may negatively affetc
on their adulthood, which could make them suffer from have an effect upon
affect
effects
affects
sedentary lifestyle
.
To recapitulate, albeit youngsters can Suggestion
a sedentary lifestyle
sedentary lifestyles
obatin
a host of merits from the Internet, they must avoid themselves from addicting to it. come into possession of
obtain
Hence
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with the notion that be in accord; be in agreement
concur
this
attitude vrings
more downsides to teenagers’ well-being as take something or somebody with oneself somewhere
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as study concentration.
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