The world’s most urgent problem is caused by over-population. Do you agree or disagree?

There are many
dicussions
an extended communication (often interactive) dealing with some particular topic
discussions
decisions
directions
revolving to the issue of whether the primary
cause
of most global problems is overpopulation. While it is true that
the growing in population
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the growing population
is inevitable, I
agre
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
agreed
agrees
with the idea that overpopulation is the main factor for most of the world serious issues, including natural disasters and pollutions.
To begin
with, human may destroy the world through exploitations of
natual
in accordance with nature; relating to or concerning nature
natural
resources. Since natural resources are scared, the more human living in
this
planet, the more they would be exploited in order to meet our demand of living.
For instance
, wooden products
such
as papers and furnitures are necessary. An increase number of
human
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humans
would
corresponding
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correspond
to the needs of wood from the trees.
However
, the loss of trees in the forests may negatively affect on the
environment in which could
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environment which could
cause
several natural disasters
such
as flooding and atmospheric pollution.
Moreover
,
besides
the necessary of exploitation, many people are
unawareness
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unaware
about the importance of protecting the planet. Since
hume
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the home
home
Hume
hum
is not
reusing
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reused
or recycling, they are contributing to the world’s pollution.
For instance
, there
is
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are
only a minority number of people who recognize the importance of reusing plastic bags. Plastic is a long-lasting
materials
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material
which may need to be limited. If plastic is not limited, it would
cuase
give rise to; cause to happen or occur, not always intentionally
cause
many diseases for both human and animals, especially marine creatures. Plenty of evidence has been shown that the consumption of plastic and other materials are increased
by
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with
time, which in turn proves that the growth in population
cause
many problems for the planet. To
recapitualte
summarize briefly
recapitulate
, an increase in population
overtime
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over time
is inevitable and I agree with the idea that overpopulation is a main
cause
for the majority of global problems.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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