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“ Many people think that men should go out to work while women’s place is in the home. To what extent do you agree or disagree?”

#people #men #work #women’s #place #home
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Gender roles have become an endless discussion on over the century. It was said that “ men should be breadwinners while women are supposed to be at home”,
this
 stereotype has existed for a thousand
year
Suggestion
years
 due to the genetic inheritance and
socio
relating to human society and its members
social
 – demographic components,
however
, I totally disagree with
this
. The fact is that that, women’s contributions are obviously undeniable. Looking back at the past, when we were in “ male- chauvinist” generation, our ancestors discriminated against women in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of men. Women always perceived a thick glass ceiling without any clear and convinced reasons.
Nevertheless
, the weaker sex’s significant offerings to society were acknowledged by the entire human being. There were a lot of women who left their
stamps
Suggestion
stamp
 on history.
For example
 “ Phan Tuyet Nhung, - who successfully gave birth to ten babies in Vietnam, “ Queen Isabella”. It goes without saying that women are as great as
men
excavation in the earth from which ores and minerals are extracted
mine
. Another reason should be taken into account is “ Men make
house
Suggestion
houses
, women make
home
that male; objective male pronoun
him
” is no longer right in the modern life. Women now are ready to accept challenges and face
to
being one more than one
two
 difficulties
instead
 of hiding themselves and being taken for granted by men. “ Hillary Clinton” is running her campaign
to
Suggestion
for
 the White House with
the great
Suggestion
greater
the greatest
 ambition to be the most powerful woman in the US history. “ Christine Lagarde” amazed the world with her brilliant managing skill leading
I
objective form of "I"
me
.M.F
overcome
Suggestion
overcomes
 the darkest time of the world economic history.
On the other hand
, a modern man is believed to get along with housework
,
Accept space
,
 take care of children as well as develop their career. In conclusion,
although
 I have to admit that it is not easy to vanish the thousand years existed discrimination on the ground of sex, men and women are more and more equal these days
(
Accept space
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304 words.)
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