IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4.5

Learning English at school is often seen as important than learning locak languages . If these are not taught, many are at risk of dying out. In your opinion , is it important for everyone to learn English? Should we ry to ensure the survival of locak languages and , if so, how?

#english #school #locak #languages #risk #ry
In our twenty-
one
 century
,
Accept space
,
 English is considered the most
language
Suggestion
languages
 used internationally between people
;
Accept space
;
In fact
,
Accept space
,
 According to
wikipedia
a web-based encyclopedia with content contributed by volunteers; most articles can be edited by anyone
Wikipedia
,
Accept space
,
 More than 60% of the people around the world speak English as a
first
language
 or
second
language
.
Accept space
.
 English
,
Accept space
,
also
, used in all
instituation
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
institutional
 and
universites
the body of faculty and students at a university
universities
 around the world in books
,
Accept space
,
 researches
,
Accept space
,
 and studies. English helps people to gain knowledge
,
Accept space
,
 know more about cultures
,
Accept space
,
 and - may
one
 day - union people to speak
one
language
.
Accept space
.
Furthermore
,
Accept space
,
 many students seek to study in English countries
,
Accept space
,
like
Canda
a nation in northern North America; the French were the first Europeans to settle in mainland Canada
Canada
 or Australia, . For these reasons, It's very important to start learning English for students from their
first
 grades
.
Accept space
.
 On
other hand
Suggestion
the other hand
,
Accept space
,
 Learning
local
Suggestion
the local language
language
 is important
.
Accept space
.
 With learning
local
Suggestion
the local language
local languages
language
,
Accept space
,
one
 can know more about the history and traditions of his country. Most of companies and
instituations
an organization founded and united for a specific purpose
institutions
institution
 of
one
's country will require fluency of
local langauge
Suggestion
the local language
local language
.
However
,
Accept space
,
 Many schools
,
Accept space
,
 especially International schools, leave out the local
language
 and focus on English
language
. Many of
students
Suggestion
the students
 of these schools struggle in speaking their local
language
.
Accept space
.
 In the near future
,
Accept space
,
 when most of generations can hardly speak English
,
Accept space
,
this
 local
language
 can die and considered from endangered
language
.
Accept space
.
 To solve
this
 problem
,
Accept space
,
 In my opinion, governments have to make their local
language
 as
obligantory subject
Suggestion
an obligatory subject
obligatory subject
 in all schools. Media and T.V shows should raise
awarness
having knowledge of
awareness
 of learning local
language
. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
 learning local
language
 is as important as learning English
.
Accept space
.
 Each of them supports
goal
Suggestion
the goal
 in person's life.
we
Suggestion
We
 should focus on how to develop both of them.
Submitted by omar.effat15 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: