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In recent times, many people are making decision to live alone. Does it have positive or negative on society?

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Some people
on
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in
 society modern are deciding to live alone.
This
 essay will try to identify the issues of living alone and
also
 explain the effects of the issues on society. One could think of various reasons why many people make
decision
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the decision
decisions
a decision
 to live with no one.
First
 and foremost, career is more important for them, they are more focus to reach their dreams if they are living alone.
Consequently
, they do not want to
married
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marry
 anyone. Those people do not want to make family and spend
time mostly
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time, mostly
 alone, that make their temper unstable.
However
, they are wondering work is happier if they do not have anyone to take care and could more focus on
job
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the job
jobs
. Somehow, it
make
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makes
 them get
stress
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stressed
 easily and bad temper. People could not live alone. They should have to socialize on society. People who live alone have fluctuate emotion and more sensitive. They need to release stress with talk other people or they become feel anxious, sick both
mentality
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mentally
 and physically.
In addition
, they could not work properly and harm
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 people around them. To conclude, I think
unconstant
likely to change frequently often without apparent or cogent reason; variable
inconstant
 temper of people who live alone
has
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have
 been caused by being company servants as well as changes in social problems and turn could lead to problems to expand social circle.
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