Write a letter to your friend inviting him/her to a music concert. Please say - where and when the concert is going to be, - what type of music will be played there, - and why your friend will enjoy it.

Hey Noha! I hope
this
letter finds you in good health and high spirits. You will be glad to know that we have a great
music
concert
this
coming weekend, and I want you to join me for an amazing amusement. The event is taking place in City Hall, located at Dundas Street West, on November 29th. As it is Saturday, you can join me. I’m sure we will have great fun together.
Moreover
, it’s been ages since we met, so we will
also
have a fantastic get-together as well. You will be excited to know that both classic and folk
music
will entertain the spectators. Because you have been a classic
music
lover since childhood, I know you will
also
be eager to watch live broadcasts.
Moreover
, all our school friends are coming to
this
event because Rishi, our senior, will perform on stage, and we are all enthusiastic to listen to our buddy. You should join, as
music
is great for our body and soul and will help relieve stress from the week. So, are you ready to break the floor? I can’t wait to enjoy that evening with our old friends. Write back soon! Warm regards, Somia
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coherence cohesion
To enhance the logical structure, make sure each paragraph has a clear central idea and that the ideas flow smoothly from one to the other. Use a range of cohesive devices to link ideas between sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
To further refine single idea per paragraph, try to focus on one key topic or detail per paragraph. This helps the reader follow your points without getting overwhelmed.
task achievement
For task achievement, ensure you address all aspects of the prompt fully. It seems that all points have been covered, but more detail could be included to fulfill the task completely, such as explaining more why your friend will enjoy the concert based on their interests or past experiences you've shared.
task achievement
While the tone is generally suitable and friendly, consistent with the nature of writing to a friend, aim to maintain a balance between informality and clarity, avoiding overly casual expressions that might be vague or unclear.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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