University students always focus on one specialist subject, but some people think universities should encourage their students to study a range of subjects in addition to their own subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that nowadays, tertiary students are prone to concentrate on their
one
specialist subject.
However
, some people support that universities should enlarge their curriculum to
encourage students study
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encourage students to study
various subjects. I totally agree that students need more knowledge
besides
their professional
one
. On the
one
hand, increasing subjects leads students reduce their restrain which results from
main subjects
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the main subjects
. In many
university
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universities
, students are always under pressure because of their intensive examinations, combining many disciplines in academic subjects, which make students be nerve- wracking.
Therefore
, some extra subjects
such
as art, music, sports help them have more time to loosen up a bit and enjoy their own company.
Moreover
, extra subjects contribute
to improve their both
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to improve both their
to both improve their
brain hemispheres. According to BBC news, all academic subjects need activities of
left brain hemisphere
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the left brain hemisphere
while composing art or music depends on right
one
. For that reason, combining both main and auxiliary subjects for students to develop comprehensively as well as avoiding abnormal development.
For example
, arts subjects help students improve their creativity, which complements for thinking
(
Accept space
(
)
in
main subjects
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the main subjects
.
On the other hand
, studying more subjects in university increases job opportunities for students. The
first
reason for
this
belief is that some pupils are not really keen on their majors as they just choose it because of their parents’ advice. By studying various subjects, they can have
chance
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a chance
the chance
to find their interest,
thus
, follow the right passions. The
second
reason is extra courses will help students avoid unemployment, which results from many students chose some popular majors
such
as finance or business-related
one
.
Therefore
, in these majors, there are scarce recruitments because of redundant employees.
However
, if students have knowledge beyond a major, they can have
wider range
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a wider range
of job choices. In conclusion, it is extremely essential that
university
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the university
universities
should include more subjects so that students can receive advantages from
this
.
Submitted by Thanh on

Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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