The only way to improve road safety is to give much stricter punishments on driving offenses. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that the driving crimes should be managed strictly is the only solution to keep
the safe
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safer
the safest
on the
road
and reduce the accidents
.
Accept space
.
Personall
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Personally
Personal
Personnel
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
disagree with
this
statement because it has more than one to make safely on the
road
. One of the
reamarkable
unusual or striking
remarkable
that people should know that the accidents don'
t
just only from
offerces
of riding, it
also
depends on the other factors.
In particular
, weather condition contributed significantly to have
negative imfact
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a negative impact
negative impact
while the transport facilities
also
caused many terrible accidents.
For example
, it is difficult to take part in the
traffic
of the place,
such
as Sapa where fog covers everyday and the
road
is around the mountain, because of the complex movement,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
in the
rain
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rainy
day.
In addition
, there are more and more vehicles in the world and the
road
isn'
t
still expanded, so a huge number of
traffic
jam become common and
consllitions
the act of cancelling; calling off some arrangement
cancellations
coalitions
between transport is more. Therefor, to improve
road
safely, people should pay more attention to find out the reasons what
make
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makes
the
roas
an open way (generally public) for travel or transportation
road
rash
rose
isn'
t
safe. The main reason that can make more accidents is from aware and responsibilities of each other
people
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person
. In specific, if the governments are able to ban the policies or manage
stricly
restricted to something
strictly
with the
unlaw
actions of driving, but the citizens don'
t
follow these, the figures of
consllitions
of
traffic
still rise.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, from people's
aware
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awareness
,
accommulating
get or gather together
accumulating
the knowledge on
traffic
is necessary in the modern world because they need to know about the laws and carry out these to save
themselve
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
and develop their country.
For instance
, people when join in the
traffic
don'
t
break the law means that the number of polices
also
recline and governments can focus on developing their country with the best way. In conclusion, for these reasons
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have mention
above i
Accept comma addition
above, I
above I
think that, it is more and more ways to keep
the safe
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safer
the safest
on the
road
with the right actions of the government and
individual
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individuals
the individual
, in the future, the accident or
consllitions
will fall suddenly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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