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There is an increasing trend around the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having a small family rather than a large family?

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Nowadays
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 most of the family turned into small family year after year.
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Some
 people think that small family is
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better
 than joint family
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 There are numerous advantages and disadvantages of having a nuclear family than a large family. With regards to the positive effect or advantages
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 while living in a small family
parents
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parent
 can concentrate on their children's education easily without any restrictions
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For
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instance, if
 we live in large family with in-laws may refuse some kind of education that are more expensive
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 Sometimes that may cause collusion between family members
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 Another important advantage is that
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 small family
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makes
 the parents and children are independent and strong in mind because small family teaches the children more focused about their education and
also
 with career
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their
 children more mature. A case in point is that, most of
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 grandparents keep their
grand children
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grandchildren
 for carefully and these over caring make the children more dependent and naughty. On the flip side
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 there are numerous disadvantages for small family than a large family.
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Firstly
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 small family make more responsible than large family
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 The main problem is that
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 in a joint or large family all members divide their responsibility and the main
controler
someone who maintains and audits business accounts
controller
controllers
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the
 family the main parent of the house
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 That may reduce the burden of
diffent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 difficult
responsibilies
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibilities
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Secondly
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increse
become bigger or greater in amount
increase
increases
increased
 the burden of
parents especially
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parents, especially
 mothers'. The point is that
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 for meeting the expenses
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womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
 needed to go for a job
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 take care about their children and
also
 do work in
thier
of them or themselves
their
 home too.
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makes
 the
womens'
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Womens'
women
woman
 more tired
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 As we compared
this
 situation with
a large family all
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a large family, all
 women
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able to
can
cant
 share the duty with others and that improve relationship between others. To recapitulate that,
nuclear family
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the nuclear family
 and
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above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
large
 family have its own advantages and disadvantages
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 The fact is that, most of them like to live in a small family
beacause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 they need more freedom and more space for their enjoyment
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 For getting these kind of benefits, parents are ready to sacrifice all the problems or difficulties related to the small family.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial stability
  • Living standards
  • Concentrated resources
  • Parent-child bonding
  • Upbringing
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Supportive network
  • Cooperation
  • Multigenerational
  • Cultural traditions
  • Agricultural communities
  • Loneliness
  • Social competencies
  • Financial strain
  • Resource dilution
  • Education opportunities
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