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Full-time university students need to spend a lot of time studying. Some people think it is essential for university students to be involved in other activities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #time #people #activities
Some people
thinh
judge or regard; look upon; judge
think
thing
studyin
reading carefully with intent to remember
studying
student
 is the most important agenda for full-
time
university
 while others convince that it is important for them to involve in other activities. There is no fully right or wrong for each party,
necause
for the reason that; on account of
because
 in some extents, full-
time
university
have
Suggestion
has
 different priorities to develop during their
time
 investment as students. Full-
time
university
 requires students studying different subjects that support for their career path after
university
. Students need to invest their
time
 not only in
theory but
Accept comma addition
theory, but
also
 search updated information
pf
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 advanced knowledge and techniques to improve their capability to become a real skilled-worker or managers in practice. So, they need to spend most of their
time
 to focusing on learning, studying
,
Accept space
,
 practicing and connecting their network in the
univeristy
the body of faculty and students at a university
university
time
 to improve themselves and explore
tehir
of them or themselves
their
 opportunities in the future. Sometimes, students
also
 need to discover something new that others can apply their discovery and invention to their study and job. An excellent full-
time
university
also need
Suggestion
also needs
 the highest scores at
university
Suggestion
the university
 to receive scholarship, career opportunities or post graduation
progrem
a series of steps to be carried out or goals to be accomplished
program
programs
 to a higher level professional academy as Master, MBA, Doctor,
pHD
Suggestion
PhD
pad
pH
 level,
specificially
Suggestion
specific
specifically
 to their subject.
On the other hand
, some people express their opinion that full-
time
university
 is just a medium step to prepare for their real
life
 after studying. So, in the
meantme
the time between one event, process, or period and another
meantime
 of learning in
university
, student should
also
 prepare their social knowledge,
life
 skill to expand their relationship, extend their ability to involve in different categories as
econimic
Suggestion
economics
economic
economy
economies
, politics, social and technical to contribute to the bigger picture of their
life
. So it is
also
 beneficial for them to learn not only in
university
, but
also
 in real
life
 by involving in other activities that support them easily to adapt full
life
 after graduation. Both parties have some extents to
agreee
be in accord; be in agreement
agree
, each of
fulltime student need
Suggestion
the full-time student need
full-time student need
full time student need
 to divide their objective with their own situation in short-term and long-term success.
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