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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 of cars has drastically increased over the
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 century. Globally and in Britain alone, there are currently millions of motor vehicles on the street. While cars remain the most popular form of
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, I strongly agree that there should be alternative forms of
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 and policies to control
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 ownership and
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. I will present my opinion in the following paragraphs. Many people argue that the invention of cars has provided a quick and easy way for people to go from point A to point B. Compared to public
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, the tram, which has many stops along its route,
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 drivers can reach their destination without having to go through unnecessary stops. Cars are more comfortable, with comfy seats and a stereo system, not to mention the fact that
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 users do not have to share their ride with strangers unless they choose to do so.
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, the huge increase in the number of cars on the street has caused several major
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concerns, including
 issues with congestion as well as air and noise pollution. In metropolitan areas, congestion occurs almost daily. The more cars there are, the more traffic jams we have to endure. Apart from congestion, the exhaust gas produced from millions of cars has contributed to many environmental problems.
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, the beeping and honking and loud engine noise from big trucks are generating more noise pollution. In conclusion, the problems associated with the increase in
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 are believed to outweigh the benefits of owning a
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.
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, alternative forms of
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 as trains and trams should be encouraged to help reduce
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 ownership and
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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