Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

When they finish
school
, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a
job
or continue their education. While there are some benefits to getting a
job
straight after
school
, I would argue that it is better to go to college or university. The opinion to start work straight after
school
is attractive for several reasons.
Firstly
, working early would help them
earning
Suggestion
earn
more money in order to serve the demand in life.
For example
,
although
they do not have
allowance
Suggestion
an allowance
, they still could buy clothes, smart phones and so on.
Additionally
, having a
job
after leaving
school
would help people gaining experience and skills that they have never learned
at
Suggestion
in
high
school
.
Finally
, individuals might become independent from
skills
Suggestion
the skills
they learned.
For instance
, people would have
speaking
Suggestion
spoken
and listening abilities in communication.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is more
benificial
promoting or enhancing well-being
beneficial
for students to continue their studies.
Firstly
, some jobs
require
Suggestion
requires
higher qualifications. To
insllutrate
, when people apply
asistants
a person who contributes to the fulfillment of a need or furtherance of an effort or purpose
assistants
, the company owners would require them
having
Suggestion
to have
academic
knowleges
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledges
that university or college could supply.
Secondly
, people could get better jobs and higher salaries after
gruading
receive an academic degree upon completion of one's studies
graduating
college.
For example
, individuals are facing
competitive
Suggestion
a competitive job market
job
market, having diploma is more beneficial
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
others.
Finally
, a well-educated person could become a useful member of society and might contribute a competitive and
prosperity
Suggestion
prosperous
nation. For the reasons mentioned above, it
semes
give a certain impression or have a certain outward aspect
seems
seams
to me that students are more likely to be successful in their lives if they continue their studies
beyound
farther along in space or time or degree
beyond
school
level.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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