A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that, animals are
very important part
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a very important part
of our ecosystem. Few people believe that it is natural to use animals for one’s own
benefit
, while others argue that it is a form of abuse. In
this
essay, I will discuss points on both sides of the argument and provide my support to the former view. From
times
Suggestion
time
immemorial, human beings have been depending on animals. There is no doubt that we derive great
benefit
from animal products like milk, medicines, nutritious food. Not only in terms products, but
also
animals are widely used for transportation and agriculture. I think it is impossible to imagine our lives without the need to depend on animals.
For instance
, there is no true supplement for animal milk in terms of nutritional value. As mentioned earlier, they form an important part of our ecosystem, and to me our ecosystems are designed in a living way beings
benefit
from one another and
co-exist
coexist peacefully, as of nations
coexist
in harmony. Now that we have looked into why it is impossible for us to imagine life without benefiting from animals.
In contrast
, there are a lot of people who are of the opinion that humans should refrain from exploiting animals. In my view,
that is
true to an extent, humans should not hunt or kill animals for pleasure;
also
they should not mistreat animals by creating a hostile living environment for them. These actions, in
long term
Suggestion
the long term
will harm mankind, because these animals that are being killed for pleasure become
extinct which
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extinct, which
will in turn result in
unbalanced ecosystem
Suggestion
an unbalanced ecosystem
that’s dangerous. It is important for humans to note that they cannot exist without deriving benefits from animals, and it is
there
of them or themselves
their
responsibility to ensure animal welfare. In conclusion, it is evident that humans cannot exist without deriving benefits from
animals
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animals, therefore
therefore
I support the concept of depending on animals for our
benefit
, but as discussed earlier
this
needs to be carried out without subjecting animals to exploitation.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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